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"This life is like a dream; time's flyin' so fast
Through my imagined memories from my forgotten past
Now pass the Hennesey so I can start to write poetically
The harmony and melody that's soon to be the death of me
You tend to see the shallow empty ghost that I pretend to be,
The enemy who patronizes everyone so emptily
But when you see the soul inside who begs for your forgiveness,
All I'll see are silhouettes watching from a distance.

Where are you now? Did you really disappear
When everyone I'd held so dear had made it so very clear
That I'm all alone...
Now? (Didn't even shed a tear)
Who am I now? Do I even have a purpose?
Everything I do is worthless. I just wanna make it hurt less
When I'm all alone...
Now (Remembering in earnest our love)
What are we now? No matter how I try
I can't understand why I won't say goodbye
Cause I'm all alone...
Now (This nostalgia never dies)"

Listened to this piece a bunch of times over and just wrote what came off the top of my head. Deep stuff that I could definitely spit to. Respect.

ForgottenDawn responds:

That's hot, yo. Thanks for sharing!

Kind of reminds me of Jeremy Soule. That being said, this could make for good background music for some video game. With a bit more diversification, it could even be a candidate for a film score IMO.

Interesting melody and in a chord progression I'm familiar with. I may do a rendition of this later on when I have my day off next. I'll definitely be saving this to my phone to listen to during break. It seems this piece has a lot going for it especially in the melody department. Keep up the good work.

stunkel responds:

Thanks! :D Glad you enjoyed it!

It's got rhythm...

Despite the lack of any riffs/progressions that thoroughly demonstrate skill and the lack of vocals, at least it's something you can jam to. The ending was pretty weak though and you could probably benefit from a good bassist, but all in all a decent song.

Eh...

The intro was too long. The lack of a significant buildup keeps it from having any kind of "rager" effect that most dance music has. The scratch effects etc. also really threw off the rhythm and for me would be very difficult to dance to. Then again I tend to specialize in Cwalking, Krumping and freestyling than just waving my arms in the air so maybe I'm wrong there. All in all, it has a lot of room for improvement if you're willing to invest the effort. But as it is right now, it has a way to go before I'd consider it "good".

Masterpeace responds:

Thank you for your advice, I will make better music next time :D

It's alright, but definitely not classical

Before I get into the review, T-Rebel's review really bothers me. First, it's not Pachelbel's Canon in D Major. Pachelbel's Canon goes 1, 5, 6, 3, 4, 1, 4, 5. This song is 1, 6, 4, 5. It is more like Beethoven's Sonata Pathetique 1st Movement http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KCGH3E Ah-aI @3:33 Also the triads never changed, they just became arpeggiated at 2:48

As per the song, it's got a pretty nice shape to it. Overall it's not classical though. I'd hazard to even place it in the category of RnB. I'd say work on your Hanon exercises to build better control over your fingers so you can keep those notes in rhythm. Also try not to end on such a muddy chord. As you go lower on the keyboard, the sound will start to be more muddy as you add more notes. Rather than playing a full 1-3-5 chord, try splitting it into a 1-5 or 1-5-8 in the bass with a 1-3-5 on top. It will sound a lot cleaner that way despite the fact that I strongly dislike ending songs on a triad.

pftq responds:

Thanks - I wasn't sure where to actually put this, it just seems like most piano ends up in Classical. I'm not too familiar with the music theory stuff, so these are good suggestions. Will keep them in mind, thanks!

The piece was good

The drum beat and progressions did indeed make it sound like a field/dungeon song for an adventure game. The ending was rather abrupt though. I have an idea of a good way to end the piece but putting it down on text would be near impossible to do. In any case, this gets an 8 from me (highest I've given today) simply because I feel the opening and ending can be improved upon. Add a short intro (even a simple upwards glissando would suffice) and fix up the outro and this would be a great piece.

Not weird...

Rather drab. Repetitive. In a sense, it feels like I'm listening to the same thing over and over and I'm sure that's not what you were going for given your apparent displeasure with mainstream music and the fact that mainstream music is often the most repetitive of all music. I don't have much suggestion to offer since I rely more on composition than I do instrumentation but I can say that I've often found that writing with different feelings in mind (rather than a single unchanging emotion) will probably yield you more interesting results.

Weight and equalization are key

At 0:49 your levels are spiking causing cracks. Most music making software (even trackers) have some way of equalizing instruments to prevent audio spiking like that. It could also use more heavy instruments since this genre is inherently devoid of musical technique and relies almost exclusively on bass and rhythm.

DCMB responds:

Well, actually, thought the vast majority of dubstep may fit your current description, I'm sure I can find some dubstep that requires talent. I make more Drum and Bass, but I'm expanding my musical range. Thamls for the review, I'll attempt to fix the bass levels.
~DCMB

It's alright

But I feel it's got a lot of room for improvement if you give it the time. It sounds too monotonous. I understand that the whole purpose of the original was to be monotonous, but as a remix I feel a lot more could be added to it to improve on the original.

Kloudtana responds:

I can see that, yeah. I did consider doing a huge overhaul for it (I still may) but i find the original melody to be so damn catchy! thanks for the review.

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