mauiboynokaoi's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[FD - Faint Daydreaming]

"This life is like a dream; time's flyin' so fast
Through my imagined memories from my forgotten past
Now pass the Hennesey so I can start to write poetically
The harmony and melody that's soon to be the death of me
You tend to see the shallow empty ghost that I pretend to be,
The enemy who patronizes everyone so emptily
But when you see the soul inside who begs for your forgiveness,
All I'll see are silhouettes watching from a distance.

Where are you now? Did you really disappear
When everyone I'd held so dear had made it so very clear
That I'm all alone...
Now? (Didn't even shed a tear)
Who am I now? Do I even have a purpose?
Everything I do is worthless. I just wanna make it hurt less
When I'm all alone...
Now (Remembering in earnest our love)
What are we now? No matter how I try
I can't understand why I won't say goodbye
Cause I'm all alone...
Now (This nostalgia never dies)"

Listened to this piece a bunch of times over and just wrote what came off the top of my head. Deep stuff that I could definitely spit to. Respect.

ForgottenDawn responds:

That's hot, yo. Thanks for sharing!

[Lost in Wander]

Interesting melody and in a chord progression I'm familiar with. I may do a rendition of this later on when I have my day off next. I'll definitely be saving this to my phone to listen to during break. It seems this piece has a lot going for it especially in the melody department. Keep up the good work.

stunkel responds:

Thanks! :D Glad you enjoyed it!

[Dance to the Music]

Eh...

The intro was too long. The lack of a significant buildup keeps it from having any kind of "rager" effect that most dance music has. The scratch effects etc. also really threw off the rhythm and for me would be very difficult to dance to. Then again I tend to specialize in Cwalking, Krumping and freestyling than just waving my arms in the air so maybe I'm wrong there. All in all, it has a lot of room for improvement if you're willing to invest the effort. But as it is right now, it has a way to go before I'd consider it "good".

Masterpeace responds:

Thank you for your advice, I will make better music next time :D

[Cloudfully]

It's alright, but definitely not classical

Before I get into the review, T-Rebel's review really bothers me. First, it's not Pachelbel's Canon in D Major. Pachelbel's Canon goes 1, 5, 6, 3, 4, 1, 4, 5. This song is 1, 6, 4, 5. It is more like Beethoven's Sonata Pathetique 1st Movement http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KCGH3E Ah-aI @3:33 Also the triads never changed, they just became arpeggiated at 2:48

As per the song, it's got a pretty nice shape to it. Overall it's not classical though. I'd hazard to even place it in the category of RnB. I'd say work on your Hanon exercises to build better control over your fingers so you can keep those notes in rhythm. Also try not to end on such a muddy chord. As you go lower on the keyboard, the sound will start to be more muddy as you add more notes. Rather than playing a full 1-3-5 chord, try splitting it into a 1-5 or 1-5-8 in the bass with a 1-3-5 on top. It will sound a lot cleaner that way despite the fact that I strongly dislike ending songs on a triad.

pftq responds:

Thanks - I wasn't sure where to actually put this, it just seems like most piano ends up in Classical. I'm not too familiar with the music theory stuff, so these are good suggestions. Will keep them in mind, thanks!

[Pandemonium ~[MB]]

Weight and equalization are key

At 0:49 your levels are spiking causing cracks. Most music making software (even trackers) have some way of equalizing instruments to prevent audio spiking like that. It could also use more heavy instruments since this genre is inherently devoid of musical technique and relies almost exclusively on bass and rhythm.

DCMB responds:

Well, actually, thought the vast majority of dubstep may fit your current description, I'm sure I can find some dubstep that requires talent. I make more Drum and Bass, but I'm expanding my musical range. Thamls for the review, I'll attempt to fix the bass levels.
~DCMB

[Nyan Cat Housey Remix]

It's alright

But I feel it's got a lot of room for improvement if you give it the time. It sounds too monotonous. I understand that the whole purpose of the original was to be monotonous, but as a remix I feel a lot more could be added to it to improve on the original.

Kloudtana responds:

I can see that, yeah. I did consider doing a huge overhaul for it (I still may) but i find the original melody to be so damn catchy! thanks for the review.

[Angel Island (Bad Future)]

Difficult to say

The drum beat is all too simple and repetitive. The melody would be alright on a different voice and it wouldn't hurt to change up chord progressions here and there to keep from being stale. The bass was alright but the synth strings seemed kind of pointless to me. You probably could have done without them at all as they're really not doing much. Also adding a bridge/hook would give people something to remember the song by. Also your song is too homophonic. You need to add, at the bare minimum, some harmony to complement the melody as it seems very empty. I often go for a polyphonic feel rather than a harmonic feel, but the decision is entirely up to you.

krazyfro2 responds:

thanks, im still relitively new to this, so i got about half of what you said. but what i did get i will try to fix. you see i taught myself so i dont know many of the terms you mentioned. i do understand that its too repetetive, i'll get right on that.

Edit: Heey, I understand all that stuff now lol. I may actually consider re-doing this. Seems kind of pointless to do it now though.

[LB - Shadows]

Nice simple relaxed feel

Definitely not overdone and definitely not amateurish. A real good track. Probably second best I've heard all day. There is absolutely nothing here that I see could really use improvement :)

Lublub194 responds:

I appreciate this a lot. Thanks :D

[Solus- Desperate Pursuit]

God damn that was sweet

But the wood blocks didn't seem to fit the song all that well. Also the snare sounds too "generic" for a song like this. I'd recommend finding some better samples. But anyway it's great to see something other than the homoophonous dance songs that litter the audio portal and listen to something that has some real musical value.

SolusLunes responds:

To be perfectly honest, the woodblocks were because I couldn't find a tick sample with sufficient force behind it. :p